tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8656507325922162214.post8198491907465660109..comments2007-11-08T11:53:18.309-08:00Comments on The smoking gun: Nuclear Proliferation: Warranted or Unwarranted Fear?NMAhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13159856671584934509noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8656507325922162214.post-66726722431592415302007-09-27T12:00:00.000-07:002007-09-27T12:00:00.000-07:00First off, let me commend you on your addressing s...First off, let me commend you on your addressing such an integral issue. As an IR major, and political follower I was wholeheartedly interested in your comments. I noticed in your introductory paragraph your second paragraph used some informal language. You said "there are quite a few blogs out there dealing with the current problems in Darfur, Congo, and Iraq" when you could have maybe said: for reasons well known, many bloggers have chosen to discuss the undeniably important dilemmas in Darfur, the Congo and Iraq. On the other hand, I think you introduce your posts, and the authors of your post very effectively which gives your comments more validity. When you mention German Chancellor "Merkel" you should probably refer to her as Angela Merkel to both familiarize your readers in case they are unaware she is a woman which is of great consequence (especially in context of your blog). Also, instead of, after your first paragraph, just jumping into your comments, I would maybe separate them with the name of the blog you commented on, and with the word "comment:". This allows your readers to more clearly understand that this is not simply a continuation of your first paragraph but rather, your comments to the exterior blog. To that note, I would maybe include a sentence in your first paragraph letting the readers know that your comments here are merely there in case of technical difficulties. As far as your posts go, I think they are really well written and show a breadth of knowledge about the subject at hand. I would however, in your first comment change the sentence which begins with "My positive feelings toward the topic:". This format feels rather list-like. <BR/><BR/>I think your questioning France's ability to be a "nuclear power house" as you put it is very effective. It not only engages the author of the post but it makes the reader of your comments question it as well. Also, your bringing in historical examples such as WWI, WWII and Vietnam effectivley supports your argument. Moreover, the two blogs you posted on seem very credible and as such were well chosen. Lastly, I would make note of what your graphics represent in your paragraphs. It might help the reader to understand, especially when dealing with such a heavy and complex topic. It was lovely to read!AADhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18125143018046104264noreply@blogger.com